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M. Brandon Robbins's avatar

Cutting yourself open and baring your insides raw is what you do every time you write. :-)

Coral Evermore's avatar

It is!! That’s what it feels like haha it’s so raw and vicseral.

Stephen Barrett's avatar

I loved the line "Tears shall merge with the ocean."

For me that was very evocative.

Coral Evermore's avatar

Thank you so much!! I was definitely in an emotional place when writing this

Caroline Beuley's avatar

Those last two lines !!

Coral Evermore's avatar

Those lines felt especially visceral for me!!

Caroline Beuley's avatar

I could tell!!

Eugenia P. Frankenberg 🥀's avatar

there was a time in my life when i felt like i also had to do this violent awakening. very evocative 🖤

Coral Evermore's avatar

It’s certainly a difficult but ultimately rewarding process…Thank you so much for reading!!🖤🖤🖤

Old_Trend's avatar

How do you find your music ?

Coral Evermore's avatar

I just look up ambience on YouTube!! There’s a ton on there for specific vibes :)

David Michael Swindle 🌀🟦's avatar

Poetry tends to be at its strongest when the images are very strong and precise, when the abstractions are minimized. This is a solid start, but I would encourage you to build on what you have here and develop it further. The strong image is what holds the reader.

Coral Evermore's avatar

Yeah, this might be something I return to and expand on. Not sure. But thank you for the solid feedback!! :)