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arushi 💛's avatar

reading this felt like slipping into a world that was already breathing on its own. the way you describe the path, the wind, the vines, and the cave makes everything feel alive and watchful. it is almost like the land itself is a character that both guides and warns. i really like how godwin moves through this space with a mix of fear and determination, and how his longing for the grimoire shapes the entire atmosphere. your writing has this calm kind of tension that pulls me in without overwhelming me. it feels mystical and a little dangerous in the best way. i could see every moment so clearly, and it made me want to know what waits for him after that awakening. you write fantasy with a visual clarity that is rare. this was beautiful to read 🤍

Coral Evermore's avatar

Oh wow!! I am glad that all of my intentions when writing this short piece came through!! I really do enjoy writing settings that act as a character in many ways!! Very glad to hear that there is a visual clarity coming through as well!! Thank you so much for your thorough feedback and kind comments!!😭❤️

Penn and Paper's avatar

I couldn’t have said it better myself!

Laura Teodorescu's avatar

Poor Godwin never stood a chance

Coral Evermore's avatar

LMAO No he did not…RIP Godwin😔

Caroline Beuley's avatar

That's a great prompt! And I love how much story you were able to fit in just 150 words! Wow!

Coral Evermore's avatar

Thank you!! I love prompts like these!! They are really fun to play around with!! This was written a while back, when I was first getting into writing fiction seriously. Starting small really helped me learn how to fit a lot into few words!!

Sambuca's avatar

I am loving this!!! And the ambience music? Yasssssssss!!! ♥

Coral Evermore's avatar

Thank you so much!! All of my fiction pieces and poetry come with ambient music attached because I am all about the ✨i m m e r s i o n✨

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Coral Evermore's avatar

Yes they did indeed!! He coveted that forbidden knowledge perhaps to much…thank you so much for reading!!🖤